I agree with Ornery.
Noble effort, but Cloudy, you're no singer. Not at the moment.
The way you did the background sounds is kind of cool, and I think the lower parts sound a bit better than the higher parts where singing is concerned. Perhaps you should choose a song that Win sings (Neon Bible would probably be a great choice; short, simple, and yet great) instead of one sung primarily by Regine, because, man, falsetto really doesn't work for you.
Vocal work is like visual arts, in that with enough training and work, no matter how much you suck, you can eventually get good with it, as long as you realize what you're doing wrong, figure out how to better yourself, practice, and have some semblance of understanding of music. I know this because I spent some odd three months teaching myself how to sing well enough to keep up with chorus kids in my school's musical. I can't really tell how serious you are about making music, but if you really want to do well with this, keep at it. You've got a long way to go, but it's not impossible.
I am pretty serious about making music although I didn't make this very seriously. I probably would be a lot better off doing a song that Win sings. I'm alot better at singing than I was a year ago. Hopefully I can make a good cover one day.
This is kind of awesome.
I got a PM from you asking me to listen to your song, so I did.
As someone who isn't really much a fan of trance, techno, or even electronic instrumentation as a whole, I found this to be surprising quite pleasant. It's really catchy, has great energy to it, and is really well put together. It's a really fun piece, and it changes itself enough in the course of its four minutes to avoid getting stale.
It is a bit busy in places, and I think you honestly should have made it more about the melody than the harmony. As an example, close to the end, where the higher parts die off into separated triplets in favor of more background sound, it feels fairly empty. I think it could have benefited from ending in a similar manner to how it began, with a more faded out melody line.
It's pretty poorly named. "Gates of Oblivion" sounds like a death-metal song name.
I don't think I have much else to say. Hope this helps!
IT is busy because I have a short attention span. And the name is a play on words because I used trance gates. :P
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